Reviewer: delaine (Signed) · Date: Aug 25, 2012 5:08 pm · On: Chapter 1

Jennifer, this was a very interesting idea, and you wrote the story very nicely. The only thing I would do to improve it is to put it into paragraphs, just to make it easier to read. The story however was nicely balanced and had a great ending. The kiss wasn't bad either. Thanks so much.